Same as the child post, but with "Inhale/Exhale" markers added. I guess even with the sound effects and lines indicating air motion, the artist felt it was still potentially ambiguous...?

Moonspeaker said:

Same as the child post, but with "Inhale/Exhale" markers added. I guess even with the sound effects and lines indicating air motion, the artist felt it was still potentially ambiguous...?

I noticed that some of the original text had also been changed, which is why I avoided simply copying the notes over. I had no idea if the translation stayed the same despite the text changes.

Ars said:

I noticed that some of the original text had also been changed, which is why I avoided simply copying the notes over. I had no idea if the translation stayed the same despite the text changes.

Hey, you're right. Pretty much subtle stuff, though--smaller font size for the upper exercise steps, moved sound effects, etc. There's a slight verb change in the description of the shoulder bounce stretches, and in Eirin's monologue, only one word is significantly revised, with 2-3 verb changes that just slightly alter her tone and/or keep the text fitting in the available space.

Oh great and powerful Moonspeaker? You accidentally copied #4 in the upper set over #3. Would've fixed it without bothering you if it had been in the note history, but nothin' doin'.

Tagged mostly everything in the whole pool. Feel free to make changes as needed.

MemphisMastermind said:

Oh great and powerful Moonspeaker? You accidentally copied #4 in the upper set over #3. Would've fixed it without bothering you if it had been in the note history, but nothin' doin'.

Appreciate the thought. If you'd copy-pasted it from the child post, no harm would've been done, but it's fixed now.

Moonspeaker said:

Appreciate the thought. If you'd copy-pasted it from the child post, no harm would've been done, but it's fixed now.

My face when I realize I didn't notice the child.

Derp.