Well, I think knowing that she's talking in past tense would help you guys have better perception at it.
Overusing translation notes is distracting. It's easy enough to tell what's going on through context.
become like this...Ahh...It...hurt... a...lot...Ooi...chi...p...pleas...Are you okay, Ooi!?Oi!Why, Kitakami-san...have you...Kitakami-san... you're Kitakami-san aren't you!?Aah...Isn't that right!?